Feedback for a Song I wrote please...

[josh popejoy]

Song I wrote called Worry Free, recorded it in my room a couple weeks ago. Any feedback would be great.

http://hackunix.org/~pope/Worry%20Free.mp3

popejoy

[Eric(h)]

Heres a face I havent seen in a while :) Hows it going, Josh?

As for the song... If I were listening to music for the first time, I would enjoy slightly more than I do at the moment. See, the problem I have with it, is that it sounds a little too dave-ish. Lyricaly, its nice, but the structure of your words is davish, and the pentatonic riff is very Stone. The chorus is actualy a little more ani difranco than dave, but still with the dave flavour seeped in.

If i were to take all of that out of consideration, and listen to the song soley on its enjoyment factor, id say about a 6.5-7 for that. Its catchy, and its a nice little tune, and honestly its the type of song that can catch a girl like no bait can this side of the Mississippi. Simple, but not something i think I can remember. Though i do happen to like the music of the chorus.

Your voice isnt bad, but its nothing really worth writing home about. it worked for the song, but I think you sang a little weakly.

The recording isnt bad, sounds a step up from computer recording, but for all I know you couldve just set up your comp mics nicely.

Thats my honest take on it. Keep it up :)

[AdamCU81]

My first thought is The Stone. The vocals sound like a cross between Dave and Ben Harper. With the lyrics, I'm not really sure what is meant by, "He started pointing his gun at me." And then you don't care that the guy is pointing a gun at you because you're worry free? It seems like having a gun pointed at me would be a cause of worry. I just don't know if I can relate...but maybe that's the point. The rest of the lyrics don't really stand out to me and the song kind of drags on a bit. If you could somehow bring up the bass a little bit I think it would groove more.

[josh popejoy]

thanks for the input...ya, this is definitely my most "dave-ish" sounding song. I'll prolly have some other stuff up here and there when i take the time to record it.

ya, my vocals are mediocre, but for the most part i think i do a good job of writing stuff that fits my voice.

popejoy

[Root]

very stoneish on the main riff, but that's fine as long as you like it

[winterscold]

It was a nice song. Sounded like the stone, but I still liked it, prolly cause the stone is my favorite song. Vocals were fine.

Good job!

[josh popejoy]

thanks guys, when i get off my lazy ass, i'll record some of my stuff that isn't so much like dmb...really only have a 1 or 2 that are.

popejoy

[jimibadfish]

pretty good song overall. a bit too redundant lyrically. your voice sounded a lot better than it did on your other post but you need to sing from your gut and let the soul bust a nut.

[Jpikr005]

if a big fan lol, other that a couple lines like "a man starting pointing his gun at me -> no sir no sir" id be scared shitless, but as you said hes obviously worry free...id definetly buy a cd of yours man, keep at it and keep posting so we can be your first fans!:thumbsup

[Pipsqueak]

nice song, man...

the main riff does sound like The Stone....but who cares.

I like it....and the chorus is very catchy.

keep at it! (wish I had the time to do this kind of stuff)

[MidwestDMBfan]

loved it

[Fargo]

Great song, nice riff you have come up with there - would be great to get a band wrapped around this ! If you do make sure you post the result.

[Fargo]

Damn I have just been singing your song in my office without realising - you have a hit on your hands sir if that can happen after one listen :)