My Tune: Be A Critical Mofo!

[NickDMBandFan]

Take a listen plz!

How Low: http://www.angelfire.com/co4/veryproudmonkey/HowLow.mp3

[NickDMBandFan]

Here are the lyrics beings my mike isnt too good for vocals:

close your eyes
dark thoughts and twisted lies
Fill the day
Jump in the shadows and hide in the shade
We are living it up in a bad way
Couldnt ask for much more could we
everybody believe what you will
Try and fill your head up

I saw
I saw you dance
held tight in the devils arms
i heard
i heard you say
It shouldnt have to be this way

Watch for the moon
you know she'll be here soon
turn out the lights
hold your breath dont make eyesight
We are living it up in a bad way
climbing through window well is safe
everybody believe what you will
Try and fill your head up

How low would you go
to fill your heart up
How low would you go
To keep your head on straight

I saw
I saw you dance
held tight in the devils arms
i heard
i heard you say
It shouldnt have to be this way

Open your eyes
everybody can see youre not invisible
those clothes dont hide
the scars and scrapes that rest in your mind
we are living it up in a bad way
under sheets, parked in the alley
everybody believe what you will
Try to fill that your up

How low would you go
to fill your heart up
How low would you go
To keep your head on straight

I saw
I saw you dance
held tight in the devils arms
i heard
i heard you say
It shouldnt have to be this way

And: How is the link holding up. I'm curious to know how quick it loads up.

[NickDMBandFan]

? No comments or suggestions? or is the link not workn?

[nrpappas]

i like tha guitar part, vocals arent great but that just be becuase of ur mic, u said isnt wasnt good but this is just my opinion

[rh41]

i think you did a good job. and the link is working fine and loading fast.

[ZaqDiesel]

Well, if you're looking for total honesty....

The guitar parts are real solid and you have a good voice, but the song IMO is really boring and seems to drag on. There's no real hook that keeps me interested. If I saw you playing this song at a bar or a club I would probably ignore the fact that there was even live music. If you have more though I'd like to hear it.

[NickDMBandFan]

Hey thanks for the feedback...so I need a better hook?

Heres my newest: Black Water-
http://www.angelfire.com/co4/veryproudmonkey/BlackWaterWStorm.mp3

--lol--same prob with mic. (still need one, any suggestions on a good chep one?)

And Lyrics:

Worry Too Much/Black Water

I see
The clouds are moving closer
Thunder rolling through my mind
Body getting colder

I feel
The wind is pushing stronger
Throw me round and pick me up
Cannot sail against this wall

What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its brewing up inside
what you gonna do its brewing up inside

Hey man
from up there what do you see
Horizon filled dark as night
Nothing but this black water

Hey man
Is there hope ahead
A quiet bay where i can put
this old ship

What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its brewing up inside
what you gonna do its brewing up inside

oh you worry too much
oh you worry too much
oh you worry too much
Drown your worries in the sea
Leave them all behind

Hey love
where did you go
Down the mountain
to valley below

Hey love
What did you see
a mouse or a lion
waitn for me


What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its brewing up inside
what you gonna do its brewing up inside

I know
it comes for me
hides on the calm days
waiting to spring

Go far
run far away
the shadow is coming
to take me away

What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its eating you alive
What you gonna do its brewing up inside
what you gonna do its brewing up inside

oh you worry too much
oh you worry too much
oh you worry too much
Drown your worries in the sea
Leave them all behind

I find its safe to say it should work out
its safe to say

[NickDMBandFan]

son of a bitch...you have to paste link into browser sry. Here they are, both of them:


http://www.angelfire.com/co4/veryproudmonkey/BlackWaterWStorm.mp3
http://www.angelfire.com/co4/veryproudmonkey/HowLow1.mp3
(http://www.angelfire.com/co4/veryproudmonkey/HowLow1.mp3)

[NickDMBandFan]

New New Song: Obsession http://merseybeat.net/studio/play.php?band_id=50&song_id=74&mode=song_hifi

And All Songs And Lyrics Of Mine Can Now Be Listened Too And Seen At This Link http://merseybeat.net/studio/bands/50/music.php