Original Song, need input please

[jdkolles2]

im going to put a song up this evening. i would appreciate if i could get a little input

[jdkolles2]

http://www.purevolume.com/jasonkolleshere is the song

it is called tell me

[D.M.B]

its excessively long, and the lyrics are very cliche. guitar is nothing overly impressive, and your voice isn't very distinctive

[jdkolles2]

i figured as much, im the male equivalent to Phoebe Buffet

[D.M.B]

haha

''smelly cat, smelly cat'

[cityondown5]

What? You took it down after one review?

Give it a chance man. Don't be shy.

[tdowe99]

Where'd the song go?

[jdkolles2]

ill put up a new one

[TheMakerDMB17]

You must not need that much input

[jdkolles2]

Sorry, been busy and working a lot. I wrote 3 new songs since i posted the first one. Im trying my best to get them on the computer.

[jdkolles2]

k now that ive had a minute.......i have 3 up on that site. Im still trying to put 2 more up. I have them written and the music is pretty well figured out i just need to lay it down when i have time.let me know what you think

[firedancer36]

that song fire is the riff from "no woman no cry" and "watchtower" combined, don't know if that is intentional or not

[jdkolles2]

its not intentional. im not familiar with that first song and what part in watchtower? i dont hear it

[MontaukNY]

are you sure. that is waaaaaay to close to be pure coincidence

edit: the no woman no cry part. i didn't hear watchtower

[jdkolles2]

ok thanks for the input. back to the drawing board. didnt like it anyway