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JCpatriot66
02-07-2010, 02:43 PM
Hey y'all. So I was in my university's talent show thing the other night, and got to perform one of my songs entitled Wrist. I ended up winning, which is cool since a) I've been trying for three years, and b) I won a $100 Ticketmaster giftcard. Anyway, a friend of mine captured it on her iPhone, so here's a youtube link.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SmGwy986F7g

Comments/suggestions appreciated. The actual music starts about 2 minutes in. And for those wondering, the "that's so sad" comment comes after my mic fell and was just getting dragged pathetically across the floor. Also, the "L" comment is about a giant L hanging from the ceiling (in the words "Truman Live") that kept swinging back and forth throughout the entirety of the show. It annoyed me.

So back to the music. Lyrics:

Cigarette to the wrist
Another one of father’s older scars
Flame fed out late as his
Cinders fade into
Dust and dark

Bite my tongue
Hide my blistered hand
Bide my time until morning
I bite my tongue

Clothe the floorboards clean
Rug stained blue
And under slate and stone
Mantle manned in pewter figurines
Her ceramic dreams be sinew and bone

Bite my tongue
Hide my head in hand
Bide my time until morning
I bite my tongue

Choke the words
That feed these flames
Their smoke set deep and
Swallowing everything
Salt my thoughts
Those bitter grains
That sour fields
Swallowing everything

Cigarette to the wrist
Just a newer scar

thezeemaneffect
02-07-2010, 03:02 PM
A few things:

1. You go to truman?
2. Wait do you work at HyVee???
3. Nice job!

JCpatriot66
02-07-2010, 03:06 PM
A few things:

1. You go to truman?
2. Wait do you work at HyVee???
3. Nice job!

1) Yessir.

2) Haha, yep I'm your friendly booze salesman.

3) Thanks!

thezeemaneffect
02-07-2010, 03:07 PM
Haha thats crazy.. I actually just left Truman at semester (couldn't do kirksville anymore lol). But I was checking out some of your other videos and I could have sworn I remembered your face from somewhere, then I made that connection. I probably drink too much.

JCpatriot66
02-07-2010, 03:09 PM
I don't blame you about Kirksville...I'm graduating in a couple months, and it couldn't have come sooner.

And don't worry, I'm one of the most well-known employees in the city, haha.

thezeemaneffect
02-07-2010, 03:14 PM
Hah I admire your courage for sticking it out up there. Thank you for bringing joy to the people of Kirksville :thumbsup :D

space-man
02-07-2010, 03:23 PM
I would have gone to Truman if it wasn't in Kirksville.

Edit: I'm from St. Louis. Going to college in New Orleans.

thezeemaneffect
02-07-2010, 03:26 PM
I would have gone to Truman if it wasn't in Kirksville.

Edit: I'm from St. Louis. Going to college in New Orleans.

Sorry to hijack this thread, but I think the next most obvious question is, where did you go to highschool? lol

space-man
02-07-2010, 03:29 PM
Sorry to hijack this thread, but I think the next most obvious question is, where did you go to highschool? lolLutheran South. You?

thezeemaneffect
02-07-2010, 03:30 PM
Oh nice I went to Mehlville

space-man
02-07-2010, 03:37 PM
Oh nice I went to Mehlville2 South County schools right there.

JCpatriot66
02-07-2010, 03:38 PM
El oh el at the Truman/St. Louis love-fest. :lol

thezeemaneffect
02-07-2010, 03:45 PM
El oh el at the Truman/St. Louis love-fest. :lol

Haha of course. On a more serious note I really like your lyrics, pretty intense stuff.

JCpatriot66
02-07-2010, 04:11 PM
Haha of course. On a more serious note I really like your lyrics, pretty intense stuff.

Thank you. The song's about my parents getting divorced after 27 years, and I couldn't tell my younger brother for a month. That sucked.