New song I recorded (thoughts, criticisms?)

[rastawolf]

Just busted this one out. A short song, my thoughts on how we get herded into being in it for ourselves, stepping on others to get ahead. If we embraced each other and cut out the bullshit, maybe we would have it even better. Wondering what you all think. Things I should touch up, stuff I should ditch?

click on "Come On Now"

http://members.tripod.com/rastawolf0/id17.htm

if it won't work, please try it again a little later. Not much bandwidth.

Thanks! Dan

[bstorey]

I would, but the site's unavailable... maybe tomorrow if I remember =)

[kgoedman]

on first listen it is pretty good..i'll listen again tonight and give some thought, advice, criticism

[bstorey]

Very nice! Your intro is a bit too long and I'm not digging the slow speed up... perhaps a stop time transition from your intro to boom! the verses... I love the voice--very nice sounding, like some of WSP's slower songs. If you record on your computer buy yourself a preamp to plug the guitar into... an audio buddy midiman works just fine for under 100 bucks... it will get rid of that hiss and prevent the audible "on and off" sound from starting vocals. But other than that I'd say you're a lot better than most folks. Your voice has big potential (I'd kill for that kinda potential)... so keep it up. I like the song's message too, perhaps a bit cliched but that's what you get sometimes =). Peace...

[rastawolf]

Thanks man. The intro needs work for sure. I like the stop-time idea. Gonna follow up on that. A lot of people seem to like my voice so that seems promising. Question for ya. I record through a 6-channel mixer into my soundcard. I've been trying to figure out how to get rid of the hiss as well as the jump between different tracks starting and stopping. I've read that it's best to record as hot as possible w/out distorting and getting clipping. You got any suggestions for me with the equipment I've got? I have a decent noise reduction program, just forgot to use it before I posted this song. It takes away most of the hiss but doesn't completely correct the problem(s). -Dan

[kgoedman]

Originally posted by bstorey
Very nice! Your intro is a bit too long and I'm not digging the slow speed up... perhaps a stop time transition from your intro to boom! the verses... I love the voice--very nice sounding, like some of WSP's slower songs. If you record on your computer buy yourself a preamp to plug the guitar into... an audio buddy midiman works just fine for under 100 bucks... it will get rid of that hiss and prevent the audible "on and off" sound from starting vocals. But other than that I'd say you're a lot better than most folks. Your voice has big potential (I'd kill for that kinda potential)... so keep it up. I like the song's message too, perhaps a bit cliched but that's what you get sometimes =). Peace...
well i've listened to it about 15 times now, and i'm not getting sick of it, so that must mean something, right?
bstorey touched on the same things i was going to mention, so i won't say much. i think your voice is easily one of the better ones, not counting pros, ive heard. your guitar line sounds familiar, when you hit the bass notes in the intro, i have heard that before...but it sounds cool, maybe speed it up a little or just add something. overall fantastic job!

[DMBGuitar999]

I can't get the link to work...

[DMBGuitar999]

Thats a cool song bro...I like your voice too...haven't heard many with one like it...like the others said...the intro could use some work...and other than that I think its a solid song. Good job and keep recording stuff :-). Nice work.

[DMBGuitar999]

By the way...do you do any gigs. Or will you when u have a full set list?

[rastawolf]

Thanks for the good words. I'm trying to get some of my stuff a little more polished and some good covers too. I've got about 30 or more songs written/ recorded. I've just got to get that done and get my ass out to try and score some gigs. Problem with a lot of my songs is that I use more than one guitar track so playin solo isn't gonna cut it with those. School is almost back in session here so I'm gonna hopefully play at a few places on campus and post some ads to try and get some people together for a band. I think a lot of my stuff could kick some serious ass if I had a decent band to back me up. I'm in Eugene, Oregon by the way. Thanks again, peace. -Dan

[DMBGuitar999]

Thats why I wondered about the gigs because I am in oregon 2...like 2 hours driving distance from Eugene or less..so if it ever came around portland area I think it would be cool to go. Post some more songs if u have 30!!! I really dig the vocals cause they are deep and one of a kind. Post another one!!!

[rastawolf]

yeah, I'd like to get a little more polished before I do some gigs. I'm thinking about going up to Portland on Sunday nights. They have an open mic at the Crystal Ballroom. That's where I'm from. I'm also posting my stuff at mp3.com. As of right now, there's only one song posted but there should be more soon. If you're interested, go to www.mp3.com/wolfcake
By the way, I'm from Portland. Where are you from? I've been working on a couple of new songs so I'll probably post them here soon. Glad you like my stuff. Hope to get some more responses from you. -Dan

[DMBGuitar999]

I live in a suburb kinda area thats a little ways away from Portland. Thats awesome u got an mp3 site. I will be checkin it now and then. Keep on postin. peace