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TheFathomist
04-05-2003, 02:01 PM
Just got some lyrics down, and I like to bounce them off of people to make sure I've got them right. Just tell me if certain lines suck or not, or what you think the general message of the lyrics are, so I know if I've got it. Also if there are any real jerks out there, don't bother stealing this, copyright is in process.

No One Cares

Verse:
All your revelation's soaring
Everyone will find quite boring
They would rather see you smile
Then listen to your depression
With your deadpanned blank expression
preaching life's not worth the while

Verse:
No one's watching from the bleachers
Overexamining all your features
While you mind your big mouthed brain
We are much too busy planning
What our lives will be spanning
To watch you struggle to obtain

Chorus:
No one cares about the problems that are only in your mind
Cause we've learned that life's too short to spend worrying all the time
No one will care in 10 years what you meant to say
And every hero I know was a bitch for at least one day

Verse:
As you look into the mirror
Does the answer get any clearer
Or do you just dig your grave
I think you know the answer
You should come out from your trance and
From your problems you'll be saved

Chorus repeat. Maybe quick guitar solo

Verse:
Forget answers that will hurt you
Make your happiness desert you
We have better things in store
And if you would stop the hassel
And sit back and ask yourself well-
What am I even crying for- you'd find

Chours repeat

Yeah, I've got about 1/2 a bridge in here too, but I KNOW that part sucks. Need to reowork it. Just lemme know what you think.

katedid81
04-05-2003, 02:35 PM
carpe diem...

not bad

dancingkerry15
04-05-2003, 03:17 PM
The message is definitely one of my favorite Latin expressions... Carpe Diem! I feel that it's talking about making the best of it and looking to the bright side because it's so much better to be glad and joyous instead of depressed... better for everyone.

Great job, and I hope I hear it someday on the radio :) you really do have a lot of potential.