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Firedncin8nancy
04-05-2003, 03:09 PM
Theres a song a wrote a while ago, and now that I'm in a new band I am wondering if anything should be changed about it before we start working on it. I was wondering if there was anything that people didn't like about the lyrics before I decided not to change them...

Whisper
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its been quiet around here for a while
the silence is almost defening
and we've been starting at each other for miles
but the way you look at me is blinding

so tell me about your problems baby,
'cause the silence must end here
i can't read your mind, what ya thinkin?
So just whisper in my ear...

you've been running around in circles
like the earth floats around the sun
blind to the evidence before you
that this could be the one

so open up your eyes baby
its time to face your fear
i can't see you from where you're hiding
so just whisper in my ear

it's just a whisper, just a whisper, just a whisper...

its been quiet around here for a while
and now it's time to say goodbye
before i dissapear into the distance
ill wipe the last tear from your eye

so tell me that you love me baby
and this time be sincere
I'll hold you close and maybe
You'll just whisper, in my ear

it's just a whisper, just a whisper, just a whisper...

Michael Russell
04-06-2003, 12:07 AM
I like it just the way it is...:)

Firedncin8nancy
04-06-2003, 12:18 AM
:) thanks a lot michael